by One quiet summer day, a boy named Kuro, had decided to go on a journey to find the dreaded Cerebus, and kill it. This journey would help or save his village, from further disaster. Because the Cerebus, forced the villagers in Kuros village to stay inside, and not too, many dared to step a few feet outside.
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If you do continue writing, you should learn how to use commas properly.
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Well, thank-you Sasori.
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I didn't mean to be rude or anything, you're just over using them. You only need them for appositives or conjunctions basically.
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I know that, I just have problems with them, sometimes.
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That really is in need of fewer commas. :3
You also need an apostrophe in "Kuros." It should be "Kuro's." :D
Anywho, you have three sentences. That's not even a full paragraph, really. A real decision couldn't be made by us without more to go on. Whether you continue it or not depends entirely on whether you want to continue writing it at this point.
You also need an apostrophe in "Kuros." It should be "Kuro's." :D
Anywho, you have three sentences. That's not even a full paragraph, really. A real decision couldn't be made by us without more to go on. Whether you continue it or not depends entirely on whether you want to continue writing it at this point.
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Hmm, I forgot about that. I'll write more, then yall can decide.
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Okie dokie.
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I think you should keep writing. :3
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