Crispin's 2nd Poem

The Dove

As I wake each day...I'm greeted by the sun's warm and loving rays...
I'm as spirited as many birds can be...I notice this spiritually white dove...
I begin to spend a lot of time...enjoying my everlasting days with this white dove...basking in the warmth and joy of this dove...

I long to be with this white dove...as the breeze of the calming winds wrap its arms around me.....this white dove who has shown nothing but pure joy to me... it has seen many things thru its dark pools of black eyes...the hate of the world..which has made the heart of the dove tougher...the sparrow inside of me longs to just say "plz, let me into your heart"...I long to mend the damages of this dove's past.

So that this dove can one day.....spread his wings freely and be unchained from the land that has intertwined into this dove...I show this dove all the wonders of being a free natured bird...no longer latched to the land but hopes towards the sky....

I rise early one day...to the hope of forever embedding my love to this unique dove...i fly to the spot...of our marvelous encounter...but to my astonishing eyes...i find the white dove lying in the patches of blanketed grass...I'm heart broken to see...that the life and breath of the dove has past from its body.....but i know that this dove has finally become free from its attachment to the land.....

I sing as mourning and joy for the white dove...for it has finally broken frm its cage of tyranny into...the skys of hope..forever free....as a breeze of trees sway...i feel a calming and tranquile..whisper of "thank you".

dang.

deepness. awesome, cris! ^^ you're a real good poet.

thanks mikel & death^^

Wow!

thanks azuzu!

love it!

thanks sori

oo great poem

thank you james^_^

ur welcome ^^

You should read my first poem.^^

i might later

I love it. Amazing.

thank u kat^__^

"It's really really good^^!"

thank u akia^__^

It was beautiful ^_^
Nice work Cris.

thank u alot claud^__^

That's tragic..The dove dies but it's spirit has risen..

Thatr's amazing, Crispin. Wow. Amazing

^///^*nods*yes, thank you titan.

wow, so beautiful! :D

Very good, very beautiful You have a unique stucture going there. A couple spelling mistakes and some chatspeak, but you have a lovely voice ^__^

the 1st 1 was great too

thanks james and aichu^__^

whats chatspeak aichu?