dark shadows and blood eyes.

thank you t-chan ^_^ so how do you think of Jz being the Naitokage hmm?

a little unexpected~ :o

well I just couldnt fine any other role that he would fit into you know?

yeah~ (:

pretty great so far~

thank you T-chan. ^_^ so that does mean my writting is getting better. ^_^

yesh! :3

yayz! now I jus thave to figure ut how I want to write chapter 2..

yes. :o

yep......

*Claps* Well done Nin! Its sounding good so far. just didn't expect you to put members in it! It adds on a interesting twist!

Awesome! X3

thank you both!!!! ^_^ you see I had this idea in my head about putting members in a story so I just went with it I'm actually taking reqest to be charaters in my story I'm only taking 5 requests to be in my story. so if either of you want just send me a PM with info on the OC charater.

:D nice nina~ (:

YAY IM THE NAITOKAGE!! NIN, I ORDER YOU TO MAKE ANOTHER SWEET CHAPTER :33

xD haha

Of course Naitokage-sama ^_^ as you wish.

haha its very good ninjanii-chan!!!!!

thank you Darknii-chan!!

I tell you all now I will get to working on Chpt 2 either this weekend or next weekend
~thank you~

chapter two!!

Its has been two days since T-chan and me left the village there was only about two days journey from the meeting place where I would send toshii off with the Yamakagture ANBU that would be waiting there. " Hey Yami could we stop for a while? I'm getting tired and I'm hungry..." Toshii asked me out of breath. I stoped on a tree branch and jumped to the clearing below T-chan followed after. " Yeah lets I'm starting to feel those two nights with only 2 hours of sleep.." I replied as I collapsed down next to the tree and I brought out a couple packets of dried seeds and fruits." here you go T-chan." I said with a tiny smile. she nodded her thanks and began eating. I decided to rest my eyes for a moment hiding my chakra I let it snake its way through the trees to search for any danger. It seemed only moments later when I felt a powerful chakra heading towards the clearing I stood up and motioned for Toshii to hide in the trees I masked her presence using my own chakra. I stood there waiting tense as a lioness ready to pounce. The two of them entered the clearing both wearing black cloaks emblazened with crimson clouds. ~Akatsuki~ I thought to myself I knew I had to protect toshii at any cost form these two. " Hey danna,un you think shes the one gaurding that jinchuriki,yeah?" asked the taller of the two. the other one just looked at me for a moment. " Of course she is you moron, you take care of her while I look for the jinchuriki and make it quick Deidara you know I dont not like to be kept waiting or keep others waiting..." the shorter one replied grouchily. ~hmm Deidara missing nin of the stone village uses clay bombs a long range fighter S-ranked missing nin.. and if I'm correct Sasori of the red sands missing nin of the sand village uses human puppets and poison long to mid-range fighter best watch out for Sasori and his puppets but I shouldnt let my gaurd down with either of them~ I took a defencive stance. " If your looking for the jinchuriki your looking at the wrong person she is already half way to the mountain village." I said trying to make a fake out. " no she's not,un I can clearly sense her chakra in that tree behind you,yeah." the blonde one said smirking cruely. Out of nowhere I heard a rustling and a scream. ~TOSHII!!~ I saw her being drug out of the tree caught by the tail of hiruko(cant spell sorry T.T) ~damn it how could I let my gaurd down like that!~ " let her go.." I told them in a deadly calm. " let me think about that,hmm uh no,un." Deidara smirked. " but we will let her live if you come with us to the Akatsuki base it will make our mission so much easier." Sasori replied in his puppet emotionlessly..~damn it~ " No! I will never betray the night village!!" I shouted bravely. " fine then lets go Deidara our mission is complete.." Sasori ordered as he turned Toshii still in his grasp. " PLEASE YAMI HELP!!" Toshii screamed helplessly before deidara knocked her out. I stood there diliberating. " fine I'll go just dont hurt Toshii..." I told them defeated. Deidara walked over to me with a smirk on his face. " good choice,un" he said knocking me out as well. I dont know what happened after that but I knew I was on my way to becoming a Missing ninja and closer to the one thing that will sway my loyalty to my village. I just hope I will make it out before that happens.
~rate and review again sorry for spelling errors T.T~

Yay! It's got good story, however, it's all clumped in a big paragraph. D:

I know I cant write any other way my computer atumaticly puts it in one paragragh and I cant change it I've tried. so sorry about that....

ninjakid23 wrote:I know I cant write any other way my computer atumaticly puts it in one paragragh and I cant change it I've tried. so sorry about that....

What if I edited it? :D

sure hey if you want you could be my beta of sorts for my story.

I would do it, because I am a grammar nazi. : )

But I would censor all the swearing, because I'm like that.