by I'm working on a fan fic and I was just wondering if ppl would tell me what they think.
Your guardian angel(Sasuke story)
~Age 8~
Rin Kizuna walked around the village. She were crying as the rain hit her skin. No one could relises it. 'Why? Why did he just do that?' She was refering to non-other then Sasuke Uchiha. He had just told her how he never wanted to see Rin's face agian. It made her so sad after all that he's done for her. She walked to the outside of the village and juat atood there. 'Whats the point in staying here? No one will miss me. No! I have to stay. I can't go, It will just let him know how much he hurt me. I have to show him I'm strong.' She turned around and walked home. Rin just sat there by herself. No one home. Thats how it's always been. Her parents left 2 years ago on a mission and, they never came back. She just laid down and cried herself to sleep.
~Next day~
Rin woke up and go ready to go to the academy. She started to run there afriad that she was going to be late. Suddenly she ran right into someone. It was Sasuke. He looked down at her. Before he could open his mouth to say something she stood up and ran away so he wouldn't see the tears in her eyes. She stoped at the front of the academy and tried to clam herself down. "Whats wrong Rin?" She turned around to see her two closes friends Mika and Jin beind her. They were twin sisters."Oh, ummm, it's nothing Jin. Just fell on the way here." She lied whiping her tears away. "Whatsever. We're gonna be late for class." Mika said. She stood up and smiled as they all walked into the academy and into their class.
~Age 12~
Rin sat in her seat waiting for her sensei with her teammates. She was just put onto team 7 made up of Naruto Uzumaki, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha and herself. She sat with Naruto talking. "When is our sensei gonna get hear? Everyone else is gone and we're just stuck hear." Sakura said. "Well thanks for the heads up miss. Point out the ovious a lot." Rin said. Sakura always got on her neaves. Yet agian, she hated all the girls that were in love with Sasuke.(She only like Hinata :P) "Why I oughta'..." She stop when she saw Naruto putting an eraser in the top of the door. "Naruto, what are you doing?" Rin asked. "I'm going to make sure that this falls on our senseis head. Thats his punishment for being late." "Our sensei is a jounin. I dought he would fall for such a childish prank such as that." "Yeah Naruto, Sasukes right." Sakura said. "Your just agreeing with him cause you love him. It's pretty ovious you morron." Rin said "Shut up!" Sakura said as she walked over to hit her. As her fist came down to smash her in the head, she cought it and threw her back. "Don't ever try to hit me Haruno. It will just cause you pain." As Sakura stood back up, their sensei walked into the room. The eraser hit him right on the head.
Please tell me what you guys think. I don't really like it but I was hoping someone would.
Your guardian angel(Sasuke story)
~Age 8~
Rin Kizuna walked around the village. She were crying as the rain hit her skin. No one could relises it. 'Why? Why did he just do that?' She was refering to non-other then Sasuke Uchiha. He had just told her how he never wanted to see Rin's face agian. It made her so sad after all that he's done for her. She walked to the outside of the village and juat atood there. 'Whats the point in staying here? No one will miss me. No! I have to stay. I can't go, It will just let him know how much he hurt me. I have to show him I'm strong.' She turned around and walked home. Rin just sat there by herself. No one home. Thats how it's always been. Her parents left 2 years ago on a mission and, they never came back. She just laid down and cried herself to sleep.
~Next day~
Rin woke up and go ready to go to the academy. She started to run there afriad that she was going to be late. Suddenly she ran right into someone. It was Sasuke. He looked down at her. Before he could open his mouth to say something she stood up and ran away so he wouldn't see the tears in her eyes. She stoped at the front of the academy and tried to clam herself down. "Whats wrong Rin?" She turned around to see her two closes friends Mika and Jin beind her. They were twin sisters."Oh, ummm, it's nothing Jin. Just fell on the way here." She lied whiping her tears away. "Whatsever. We're gonna be late for class." Mika said. She stood up and smiled as they all walked into the academy and into their class.
~Age 12~
Rin sat in her seat waiting for her sensei with her teammates. She was just put onto team 7 made up of Naruto Uzumaki, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha and herself. She sat with Naruto talking. "When is our sensei gonna get hear? Everyone else is gone and we're just stuck hear." Sakura said. "Well thanks for the heads up miss. Point out the ovious a lot." Rin said. Sakura always got on her neaves. Yet agian, she hated all the girls that were in love with Sasuke.(She only like Hinata :P) "Why I oughta'..." She stop when she saw Naruto putting an eraser in the top of the door. "Naruto, what are you doing?" Rin asked. "I'm going to make sure that this falls on our senseis head. Thats his punishment for being late." "Our sensei is a jounin. I dought he would fall for such a childish prank such as that." "Yeah Naruto, Sasukes right." Sakura said. "Your just agreeing with him cause you love him. It's pretty ovious you morron." Rin said "Shut up!" Sakura said as she walked over to hit her. As her fist came down to smash her in the head, she cought it and threw her back. "Don't ever try to hit me Haruno. It will just cause you pain." As Sakura stood back up, their sensei walked into the room. The eraser hit him right on the head.
Please tell me what you guys think. I don't really like it but I was hoping someone would.
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