Crispin's just a lil poem

Souls

My lovely dove....you bring the flight of love...to the breath and spirit of
this sparrow....enveloping in the glow of your spiritual self.....nothing can be ever happier...than saying these words..."i love you".....they are forever entertwined into the deepest confines of my heart and soul...our hands intertwined in a deep beyond any....we call..for each other....like long lost love....for we can...never be solemnly free without one another....now...spread your wings...and fly with me into the hope of a new tommorow..in the skies.

ooo00o0o
i like this
its so sweet
you should write more

thanks i have others^^

can i make one?

yeah u can make ur own poem.

just click on new topic.

good job cri

thanks..its not as good as the others...though.

No all of your poems r the best^^

True, all your poems are awesome ;D

see i'm right:p

XP..nah this i just sent cuz i felt like writing some poetry.

its not all that great... -_-

ok

Wow Onee-sama. That was beautiful.

thanks charm

I think I'd appreciate the metaphor of doves and sparrows more if you didn't use it in three separate poems. After reading all three it begins to run thin and it seems like you're just recycling the same thing and changing up the length...

Just a quick thought.

its harsh....but i see what you mean.*nods*

ya sado why do u have to be sooo mean

...Just curious Judai but is any criticism, regardless of how warranted it may be, mean?

Because if so then I'm "mean" because I'm trying to help out by saying where people could improve.

In reality though, being mean would require that I have malicious intent with which I intend to do mental, physical, or emotional harm to a person. And as I have no real desire to harm anybody here in any manner I wouldn't call that being mean.

Verry deep. I give you a good concent!

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thank u katanna

Any time!

have u read my other poems?

No, I cannot say that I have... (Or cannot recall....)

check em out anytime^_^

I'd love to, but I'd have to check later on int the week, my net time is running out and I still have a long list of things I want to get through...

Nice chatting with you!

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